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et'uufmishshil'ekchalè... 'èhöv èltn'estöv... le eltsheejmsel'è......

et'uumejshelkarisel'etle




I... love you,... James......

I'm Clarice.
This is a six-words story that I came up with for a contest on dA,

I thought that with the six words,
I would be able to do something in Èmuufeneen,
real prose won't work, but this did!
And I am very pleased with the result,
and also with the extra dimension of the feelings,

The translation isn't accurate at all,
because of all the positives and negatives,
which you might have noticed.
So know that, every word has somekind of feeling to it,
and even parts of words have there own feeling.

The complete translation is:

Now sadly unlikely to exist, unlucky me is luckely a good loving person with a terrible aspect of complexity which is in the time which I hate, caused by the lovely James, but I'm happy he does that (indication that nothing is following)

Unlucky me who would love communication is sadly enough Clarice, a name which I hate.

Note to the reader:

Be sure to know that these words are no longer than when everything would be neutral, so it is not that unlikely to be someone's dieing words.
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maycelestia Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This certainly paints a number of different scenes:

~ Someone on their deathbed (or very elderly) cannot properly identify the loved one they talk to (such as mistaking a grandchild for their deceased spouse) — very poignant
~ Someone admitting their love to a 'mistress' (I don't even know what male term there is for that? A little sexist right?) but it is intercepted or overheard by their wife — scandalous!
~ Someone thinks their loved one is there but it is someone completely different — quite amusing
~ Someone simply doesn't know their 'loved' one's name (or gender apparently!) —†funny and a little sad

There you go, a six word story with so many different possibilities (I'm sure there's more too), but all of them have emotion behind them. Plus the positive/negative marking on the words is always interesting with how it is used.
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
oh, so many meanings, and the thing is, I didn't even intend it to have any of the above meanings, although the second is awefully close,

I think it should've been a six word play to really be able to show the total story...

And in this language, (»muufeneen) it's not even at the end of the words, it is in every syllable which are the morphemes, and it's impossible not to 'add' this,
so something that has 3 syllables has 3 feelings for each syllable! so the amount of possible feelings for this word is 27, and 3 syllable words are really common, I would even say that most 'real' words start from 4 syllables so 81 possible feelings, then 5 has 243 possible feelings,

the feeling aspect is really VERY free in this language, but also rather unnatural and plain rediculous, it's the language that was invented by my 'sages' and notice how they do use verb structures, rather impressive for conlangers (which those group of people are) to invent verbs don't you think?
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Veji-chan Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010  Student Writer
Awesome. I definitely need to learn that language. It seems so much more efficient than English.
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I thank you,
for I am the one who is creating it.
You can find lessons in my gallery.
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Veji-chan Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010  Student Writer
Really? That's awesome. I shall definitely have to check them out!
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Curisosia Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010
So...much...shades of meaning.
I mean, we can do things like normally with connotations and stuff...but that simply takes it to a whole new level.
...Wow.
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I know, that's kinda the main feature of it,
and it makes it also possible to talk completely neutral,
something that nobody achieves in our language,
(is it white, caucasian,...
I took the easiest example to make sure that I'm not offending anyone)

It's possible because all words are very in touch with their origins,
and so everything is built up from several parts about which you can feel something,
Example: "logic" comes from "time",
so in the word logic I can also add a feeling to "time",
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Curisosia Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010
I know...but...wow.
(Political correctness! XD. That's not entirely the same thing, but yeah. :))

I gathered that. (...wait, what does logic have to do with time?)
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
logic is a link between things that is correct in all times,
but it doesn't have to be completely logical...

(Ok, I admit, some things are illogical,
but it's a almost in the right derection...)
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Curisosia Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
Cause-and-effect?
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
well it's actually exactly that!
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TysonLaFollette Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010
Knowing what I know about Émufeneen I can totally understand how those words could have a lot of meaning that doesn't come through in less than a couple paragraphs of english.
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
indeed it does change about every symbol of feeling,
but what do you think about the english 6-word text?
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TysonLaFollette Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010
I think it's funny that someone would be in love with another person who doesn't even know their name.

"Hi. I'm Clarice. I've been watching you."

lol
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It's supposed to be the dying word of someone,
but I'm affraid the dots didn't do it then...

(b.t.w.: Clarice is a girls name,
and James is a boys name,
so it's not possible he's just mistaken)
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TysonLaFollette Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010
Ah! Final words. I see then. Like a mother on her deathbed speaking to her son.

Yeah, I knew it was a girl's name.
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It's more of like,
a man finally admitting that he's in love with someone called James,
and not anymore with his wife/girlfriend Clarice,
but it is indeed quite ambiguous,

(in »muufneen, I think it's much clearer,
well I'll just have to add some more lessons then!
any idea's?)

could you try to make a six-words story yourself?
I would love to read it!
(especially since it will take about a minute, maximum, ahh... lasiness)
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TysonLaFollette Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010
I can make one in English. Not so much in your language. Give me a while. I want to spend more than a minute.
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ImaginaryMdA Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I know, but try like, in English?
and you can have all the time you want,
the contest is until the second of June,

And I kinda guessed it wouldn't work in my language yet :P
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